CrazyLemurs
25-01-2014, 11:17 PM
Hi all
I've written up my personal statement to apply for sixth form; I'm intending to stay at my current school but nonetheless I have to apply, and in rare cases current students are actually not allowed to return due to behaviour or grades.
I'd like it if people could take a read (beware, it is 877 words so you may have a challenge) and tell me how they would change it or whether I should add anything. Any references to working at a website are of course referring to Habbox, and any mention of the school I'm at/want to be in will be generalised. Thanks in advance fans x
As a person, I feel I am suited to a school like SCHOOL, for I have a strong work ethic and in the face of any adversity understand that my education is the most valuable thing in my life. Even when those around me try to distract me, I am able to exert a level of self-control and continue as I have been. I do accept that my method of learning and social interaction can be unorthodox at times, and I have found other people can be scared away by how intensely I try to develop close friendships with them, which has reduced the number of relationships I expected to make upon joining this school in 2009. As SCHOOL accepts a large group of external students for the final two years of its education, I will be able to start afresh with some of these people and choose again those who I become close to,whilst still keeping many of the same faces around me.
In my free time, I enjoy interacting with technology (the reason I decided to learn Computing as a GCSE subject) and watching sports such as tennis and badminton, although I do not play on a regular basis for a club. Through these, I have been able to bond with people from around the world, connected by the Internet, via a website I can detail in the interview stage if necessary. On this, I have performed a number of community and content-based staff roles in the past three years from writing informative news articles to managing a virtual customer support desk. I hope that in the future SCHOOL caters more to students in the upper years who want to get involved with technology, and I would be happy to spearhead a scheme like this.
Despite still being a student, I have been able to be a part of multiple personal development events, many of which were organised and run by SCHOOL, such as being leader of a team which went on to beat 35 others in the SCHOOL Business Challenge as well as placing in the top 400 14 and 15-year-old students in the country for Mathematics in the UKMT Intermediate Mathematical Olympiad, the success of which I hope to continue in future Intermediate and Senior events from this organisation. In the course of 2013, I worked with other students from SCHOOL at OTHER SCHOOL, a school for children with social disabilities, which was a rewarding experience that taught me patience and empathy although at times challenging.
My subject choices reflect who I am: a person who ruthlessly comes to conclusions and can think critically about the world and the relationships, networks and communities within it. These kinds of skills are becoming ever shorter in supply in the modern world as Western students and employees expect an easier and easier course through their work, something I personally do not believe in doing.
Mathematics and Further Mathematics go hand in hand, showing I am prepared not only to take a facilitating subject but (as the latter's title describes) take it further to broaden my understanding of what I consider a specialist subject for myself. From GCSE level, I have developed a knowledge of Mathematics and my recent success with the course supports this, scoring 95% on each of the final exams for this subject and obtaining an A* grade.
Economics can also be used with mathematics in various university courses such as Econometrics, Financial Mathematics and Economics itself, which suggests my choice of A-Levels is appropriate. My previous experience in Business Studies, a subject which looks more acutely at how a single business operates, as opposed to national and international economies, has prepared me well to study a subject like Economics: the style of long answer question is similar in both and the mathematical backbone of the subjects is necessary.
Finally, in a world where the dependence on technology is ever increasing, not including a subject directly related to ICT in my qualifications would be a mistake; I chose Computing due to my current familiarity with the subject, where I achieve a solid A in many assessments. This is complementary to Mathematics and Further Mathematics for university courses involving Programming, Theoretical Mathematics and Computer Science, which I would be open to studying at a further level.
I have my sights set on attending a successful university of high calibre such as the London School of Economics & Political Science or Warwick University, and studying all four of these subjects for two years will greatly improve my chances of obtaining a place at one of these establishments, who value a greater number of A-Levels, providing they are of healthy grades, something I feel SCHOOL can ensure.
Thank you for taking the time to read my personal statement, and my application in general; I believe I have provided the right information for you to determine the kind of student I am, as well as my suitability for studying the A-Level subjects I yearn to. I hope you consider my application with an open mind and see I am a perfect student to study at SCHOOL for a further two years.
I've asked my mum, who really thought it was good, but she is easily impressed and having read some of her personal statements in the past not a pro at the whole "selling yourself" thing
If you guys also think it's good, I'll send it off with the rest of my application, which has to be in by like February 6th or something
I've written up my personal statement to apply for sixth form; I'm intending to stay at my current school but nonetheless I have to apply, and in rare cases current students are actually not allowed to return due to behaviour or grades.
I'd like it if people could take a read (beware, it is 877 words so you may have a challenge) and tell me how they would change it or whether I should add anything. Any references to working at a website are of course referring to Habbox, and any mention of the school I'm at/want to be in will be generalised. Thanks in advance fans x
As a person, I feel I am suited to a school like SCHOOL, for I have a strong work ethic and in the face of any adversity understand that my education is the most valuable thing in my life. Even when those around me try to distract me, I am able to exert a level of self-control and continue as I have been. I do accept that my method of learning and social interaction can be unorthodox at times, and I have found other people can be scared away by how intensely I try to develop close friendships with them, which has reduced the number of relationships I expected to make upon joining this school in 2009. As SCHOOL accepts a large group of external students for the final two years of its education, I will be able to start afresh with some of these people and choose again those who I become close to,whilst still keeping many of the same faces around me.
In my free time, I enjoy interacting with technology (the reason I decided to learn Computing as a GCSE subject) and watching sports such as tennis and badminton, although I do not play on a regular basis for a club. Through these, I have been able to bond with people from around the world, connected by the Internet, via a website I can detail in the interview stage if necessary. On this, I have performed a number of community and content-based staff roles in the past three years from writing informative news articles to managing a virtual customer support desk. I hope that in the future SCHOOL caters more to students in the upper years who want to get involved with technology, and I would be happy to spearhead a scheme like this.
Despite still being a student, I have been able to be a part of multiple personal development events, many of which were organised and run by SCHOOL, such as being leader of a team which went on to beat 35 others in the SCHOOL Business Challenge as well as placing in the top 400 14 and 15-year-old students in the country for Mathematics in the UKMT Intermediate Mathematical Olympiad, the success of which I hope to continue in future Intermediate and Senior events from this organisation. In the course of 2013, I worked with other students from SCHOOL at OTHER SCHOOL, a school for children with social disabilities, which was a rewarding experience that taught me patience and empathy although at times challenging.
My subject choices reflect who I am: a person who ruthlessly comes to conclusions and can think critically about the world and the relationships, networks and communities within it. These kinds of skills are becoming ever shorter in supply in the modern world as Western students and employees expect an easier and easier course through their work, something I personally do not believe in doing.
Mathematics and Further Mathematics go hand in hand, showing I am prepared not only to take a facilitating subject but (as the latter's title describes) take it further to broaden my understanding of what I consider a specialist subject for myself. From GCSE level, I have developed a knowledge of Mathematics and my recent success with the course supports this, scoring 95% on each of the final exams for this subject and obtaining an A* grade.
Economics can also be used with mathematics in various university courses such as Econometrics, Financial Mathematics and Economics itself, which suggests my choice of A-Levels is appropriate. My previous experience in Business Studies, a subject which looks more acutely at how a single business operates, as opposed to national and international economies, has prepared me well to study a subject like Economics: the style of long answer question is similar in both and the mathematical backbone of the subjects is necessary.
Finally, in a world where the dependence on technology is ever increasing, not including a subject directly related to ICT in my qualifications would be a mistake; I chose Computing due to my current familiarity with the subject, where I achieve a solid A in many assessments. This is complementary to Mathematics and Further Mathematics for university courses involving Programming, Theoretical Mathematics and Computer Science, which I would be open to studying at a further level.
I have my sights set on attending a successful university of high calibre such as the London School of Economics & Political Science or Warwick University, and studying all four of these subjects for two years will greatly improve my chances of obtaining a place at one of these establishments, who value a greater number of A-Levels, providing they are of healthy grades, something I feel SCHOOL can ensure.
Thank you for taking the time to read my personal statement, and my application in general; I believe I have provided the right information for you to determine the kind of student I am, as well as my suitability for studying the A-Level subjects I yearn to. I hope you consider my application with an open mind and see I am a perfect student to study at SCHOOL for a further two years.
I've asked my mum, who really thought it was good, but she is easily impressed and having read some of her personal statements in the past not a pro at the whole "selling yourself" thing
If you guys also think it's good, I'll send it off with the rest of my application, which has to be in by like February 6th or something