Habbox's New Route

[Mrs.McCall]

Haha, i'll keep it exclusive to Habbox for now. I plan a 10 part series in total.

I'll move onto something else then and return for a second series

[Slowpoke]

Oh yeah. We were discussing this sort of thing in school as we have GCSE mocs next week and I told the class about this one and miss read it out to the class haha.

[Muniflex]

How i read second one?

It good, i have it


w0w it really not going good for him

More great writing, more +rep if it lets me..

[Pyroka]

Go onto the articles section of the Habbox webpage. tis there, and I want moar than just 10 ploz.

[FlyingJesus]

It's nicely written all that, so good from a literary point of view, but a little unrealistic for my liking. Cheaters usually get stick for a while, and the person they cheated with too, but I can't see a whole school turning on someone just for a night of passion

On a note more critical of the writing rather than realism of it, I think you've done well to do it in a script style - it gets the point of what's happening across bluntly and eliminates the usual prattle that most stories have and (unfortunately) that more still do badly.

[Grig]

That was great + rep

[Muniflex]

It's nicely written all that, so good from a literary point of view, but a little unrealistic for my liking. Cheaters usually get stick for a while, and the person they cheated with too, but I can't see a whole school turning on someone just for a night of passion

On a note more critical of the writing rather than realism of it, I think you've done well to do it in a script style - it gets the point of what's happening across bluntly and eliminates the usual prattle that most stories have and (unfortunately) that more still do badly.

Yeah but the thing is that plays and programmes are alowed to be unrealistic, it's makes it more fun...


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[Pyroka]

TOo unrealistic make them rubbish tbh. Lost is a good example of that.

[Muniflex]

TOo unrealistic make them rubbish tbh. Lost is a good example of that.

I don't watxh Lost.

And obviosuly if you have an unrealistic story line just make sure the whole programme is unrealistic and is obviously meant to be...

[Pyroka]

Lost was just silly, it was good at the start and then they wrecked it by making it too unrealistic. These sorts of real-life situations are really good though, and I guess you learn how to deal with them in a sense. Mrs.McCall is guidance yesyes?