This is a peom I wrote for school, relating to a play we are reading.
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Hidden Emotion
Eyes are stinging, knee's are weak,
Mouth is open, yet I don't speak,
Quivering lip, shivering silhouette,
Breathing deeply, cheeks are wet,
Eyes wander, constant fear,
Heart races, I shed a tear,
Feeling helpless, silently sighing,
Feel so lonely, in this constant crying.
False excitement, feeling low,
Artificial smiles, so they won’t know,
Behind the pretence, sits a lonely soul,
Ghastly bruises, black as coal,
Staying strong, in an ordeal so cruel,
I secretly wished, that I wasn’t the fool,
Living in fear, I would never reveal,
The horrid violence, that was too real.
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Great! =] Ill Add Rep , Darnit i cant, Remind me 2morrow.
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You could add some metaphors, similies. Some imagery would be good.
A few fixing to do, but its good =] Regards , Doc.Its about the quality of the post, not quanity! ©
"One Who Gossips to you, Gossips OF you."©[My quotes, Mine! *Smack*]
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